Keeping the Murderer Secret until the End

By Price McNaughton, @PriceMcNaughton

When I first began writing
murder mysteries, my biggest fear was that I would reveal the murderer too
soon. I hate books that make the perpetrator evident from the moment he/she
steps onto the page. I didn’t want to be guilty of the same! 
Every time I slipped
in a clue, I felt that I had just shone a spotlight on the guilty party. Some
authors try to protect their antagonist by refusing to leave any clues that
lead to him/her, but I was never comfortable with this strategy. There are
better methods of protection.
I’m the first to admit that I
have never formally studied writing murder mysteries, though I have read
hundreds of them and written a few. Instead, I followed my own rules, which I
have listed below.
  1. You must decidedly know who your murderer is and why
    they did it
    . This seems obvious, but I’ve read many books that do
    not explain the why factor. It seems as if the author has no idea who
    their antagonist is or what motivates them. I’ve actually read a couple of
    books that disintegrate to the point that the ending is… drumroll… why
    he/she did this remains a mystery. 

    The murderer admits to killing everyone, but gives no examples as
    to how he/she committed these crimes or why he/she did it.
    This leaves the reader feeling confused. One of the main
    reasons that a person reads a murder mystery is to find out what would
    motivate someone to commit the crime. The author can always explain what
    has occurred, but at the very least the detective must have a theory as to
    why someone would commit such a crime OR the killer must explain why.

Good example: It was obvious
now that Mr. Smith had been jealous of his wife’s first husband. He feared that
his wife still loved him and that the man would return and put an end to his
happy marriage. Mr. Smith felt that he was left with only one choice. Murder.
And so that was what he did.
Bad example: “Yes, I killed
him.” Mr. Smith said.
“But why?” Mrs. Smith asked.
She did not receive a reply. It remains a mystery to this day. The End.
 
Quick tip: Know your murderer inside and out. 
  1. You must leave clues. How many of you have read
    a book that gives absolutely no clues as to who committed the crime?
    Believe or not, I have a read a few and they are very frustrating. The
    clues do not have to be obvious or even fully explained. In fact, fully
    explaining the motivation of every character gets old very quickly. Leave
    some mystery in your mystery!
Good Example: Mrs. Smith’s
face contorted briefly in an expression of deep sadness as her fingers trailed
over the lovely lace edging the material of the gown. Mr. Smith pressed his
lips together in dismay as he turned away.
“I hate seeing her so upset.”
He said as he left the room.
Anger flickered briefly in
Mrs. Smith’s eyes as she jerked her hand away from the soft fabric.
Now all you have to do is drop a line here or there in the
book that could explain her feelings, such as “Mrs.
Smith was left at the altar once several years ago, but you would never know
it; she’s so happily married now.”
This could
explain why she acted as she did earlier in the book and ends up fully
explaining the mystery. Mrs. Smith still loved her ex and Mr. Smith killed him
because he feared he would lose Mrs. Smith. Mr. Smith didn’t know that Mrs.
Smith was also angry with her ex for some reason, but the reader does. The
anger might make some readers suspect Mrs. Smith of the murder.
Bad Example: Mrs. Smith’s
face contorted briefly in an expression of deep sadness followed by anger as
her fingers trailed over the lovely lace edging the fabric of the gown because
she was left at the altar some years earlier.
 
Quick tip: Try to never use because when explaining a
character.
  1. Reread your book and add in clues as you see fit. If you
    know your character and their motivation, it’s easy to pick out places to
    drop extra clues while rereading your book.


Example Sentence: Mrs. Smith
said she spent the day reading. Her half-opened book lay on the table.
Added clue/red herring: Mrs.
Smith quietly informed the officer that she had spent the day reading. The
detective paused in his questioning as his gaze fell onto the open book on the
table.
“Were you as surprised as I
was when Sarah died?” the detective asked.
“What?” Mrs. Smith replied,
distracted.
“In the book?”
“Oh, yes, quite.” Mrs. Smith
smiled sadly. “I’m afraid my mind was elsewhere.”
“I understand.” The detective
replied as he returned the book to the table. “I would be, too.”
With the extra information above, the observant reader now
has some doubt in their mind as to whether Mrs. Smith was actually reading the
book as she said.
Quick tip: Red herrings are much easier to add in after the
book is written as long as you don’t write yourself into a corner with your
characters, such as explaining everything they do and why.
  1. Let your characters LIVE. Life is a mystery. Let
    your characters retain some mystery. No one can ever be fully explained,
    should your characters be any different? The answer is no. I try to write
    my mysteries where anyone
    could have
    committed a crime, but most are unlikely to have done so. Many people have
    experiences or motivations in life that could lead them to crime, but do
    not because of the person’s psychological makeup/ upbringing/ etc. People
    are more complex than heroes and villains. Characters should be as well.


Example: Tears welling in his
eyes, Mr. Smith reached for his wife’s hand as she stared into the casket. “I’m
sorry you have to go through this,” he said as he held her hand tightly. The
dark bags under his blue eyes revealed the fact that he had spent the night sitting
up with his inconsolable wife.
“I know.” Mrs. Smith replied,
squeezing his hand in response. She felt his arm slip around her shoulders as
he supported her small frame.
He is sorry she has to
go through the situation he created. He’s just more concerned with losing her
than with her facing loss. He’s selfish.
Quick tip: You can’t ever go wrong with making your
characters human and therefore both good and bad.
  1. Let your protagonist think. Create questions in the
    readers’ mind that you would consider if you were in the same situation.
Example:  Is Mrs. Smith happy in her marriage? Does a part of
her still dwell on her past love? Would she be unhappy enough to kill over it?
The detective wondered as he studied the couple before him.
Quick tip:
It’s okay for a protagonist to be unsure.
The perfect murder mystery is
very obvious when the reader reflects on the information they were given. What
didn’t stand out before becomes central to the plot line. I love a book that
redirects the thought process and when analyzed, the information shifts into
focus much like a puzzle picture when the last piece is added. I think most
readers agree with me. I don’t pretend to have all the answers, but these are
the methods I use when writing. I do believe, if you follow these rules it
helps in keeping the murderer secret until the great reveal at the end.
What rules do you follow when
writing your murder mystery? Do you already have a story in your head
concerning Mr. and Mrs. Smith? Visit my blog to learn more about writing your
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Price
McNaughton was born and raised in a small town in Tennessee. A childhood
steeped in the stories and legends of her ancestors as well as the southern way
of life led her to carry on the tradition and become a storyteller herself.
After years of traveling and working at a variety of jobs, she has finally
returned to her roots and devoted herself to writing. She is the author of A
Vision of Murder and Murder is Ugly as well as The Ruby Necklace (a
mini-mystery).
Murderis Ugly: When Jinx Delaney agrees to spend a horse-filled, relaxing summer with
her old friend and sorority sister, Brynn Brookefield, in her exclusive
community, she never suspects that murder will be the second house guest. Set
in a beautiful neighborhood in the Deep South among carefully restored,
historic homes and nosy neighbors, Jinx finds that looks can be deceiving and
murder truly is ugly.
Book review blog: http://www.talebearers.com/
Twitter:https://twitter.com/PriceMcNaughton

Elizabeth Spann Craig

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Elizabeth writes the Memphis Barbeque series (as Riley Adams) and the Southern Quilting mysteries for Penguin and writes the Myrtle Clover series for Midnight Ink and independently. She also has a blog, which was named by Writer’s Digest as one of the 101 Best Websites for Writers. There she posts on the writing craft, finding inspiration in everyday life, and fitting writing into a busy schedule.

7 Comments

  1. Elizabeth Spann Craig/Riley AdamsApril 16, 2013

    Thanks so much for posting today, Price!

    Great tips here. Especially the advice to really know your murderer and what motivates him. If it doesn’t make sense to *us*, it definitely won’t to our readers.

  2. JoanneLApril 16, 2013

    I’m like you, Price! I’m always afraid I’m shining a big old spotlight on my murderer every time I tuck in even the most subtle clue. I also agree that you have to give the reader a fair shake. The truth can be so buried that only someone superhuman would spot it as it goes by, but it has to pop out when the reader flips back after finishing. In my new mystery, Bad Publicity, the masking of the murderer was particularly tricky. Getting the clue balance took a lot of tweaking afterwards. One tiny extra tip and the whole thing became really obvious to a savvy reader. I think I got it, though! Nobody’s figured it out yet. I also find misdirection a challenge. Anyway, thanks for the thoughtful piece!

  3. Gina GaoApril 16, 2013

    I believe that Agatha Christie does a pretty good job with this.

    http://www.modernworld4.blogspot.com

  4. Alex J. CavanaughApril 16, 2013

    I don’t write mysteries, but I have read ones where the killer because obvious too soon. I would think test readers and critique partners would be a good gauge – they don’t know the killer and would be able to tell you if there were enough clues or too many.

  5. Tiffany GarnerApril 16, 2013

    Great tips! I particularly liked this one: Try to never use because when explaining a character. I think that’s fantastic advice that I’d never thought of before.

    I don’t write murder mysteries per say, but there is murder and mystery in my novels, so I have a slightly different challenge. But the person I draw most from when writing mystery is Agatha Christie – she is the queen of mystery and her books are crafted so incredibly beautifully!

  6. Price McNaughtonApril 16, 2013

    Thank you, Elizabeth, for hosting my blog tour.

    I’ve really enjoyed reading all of your comments.

    JoanneL isn’t it funny how that happens? Just one extra clue can make a world of difference!

    Gina Gao I would have to agree. She is my favorite mystery writer.

    Alex J. Cavanaugh I agree with you. I have several beta readers and when I am sending out my first copy, I always make a list of questions for the beta reader to answer at the end of each chapter. Guess which one is the first one on the list? “Who do you think the murderer is and why?” I find that if I ask my beta readers this, I can pinpoint the chapter that reveals the murderer and therefore correct it if need be.

    Thank you Tiffany Garner. Like I said before, Agatha Christie is the best!

  7. JoelApril 17, 2013

    I definitely want to know who, and why. But as a fan of Chandler, I don’t mind a mystery that’s muddy and unclear, as long as I have enough information to make some good guesses. It’s said Chandler himself wasn’t sure who committed some of the murders in his books (but then, he rarely kept to a single corpse, so he could fudge here and there.)

    I like being fooled, but fooled fairly. Mislead me, with realistic information that fits, but just points me the wrong direction.

    But cheat, by hiding vital evidence or having the motive be preposterous, and I won’t read you again.

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