Giving Villains More Depth

by Elizabeth S. Craig, @elizabethscraig
Image by Daniel Gies
Most people aren’t 100% good or 100%
bad.  There are bits of goodness and
badness in all of us…including villains. 
Flat villains with no dimension to them
are just as uninteresting as Pollyanna protagonists. As a reader, my interest
is always piqued when I get to see another side of a bad guy…if he does
something unexpectedly kind, for example. 
I usually wonder if there’s an ulterior motive—and wondering is good for
readers. It helps keep them engaged in the story.  Even if there isn’t
an ulterior motive, it’s interesting because it offers another side to the
character.
In mysteries, this is especially
important because we don’t know who the bad guy is until the end of the
book….or we shouldn’t, if it’s a traditional mystery (thrillers operate under
different rules.)  
In one of my books for Penguin, I’d
turned in the manuscript for editing.  My
editor emailed me back and told me that this time she’d been able to figure out
who’d done it.  She pointed out that the
murderer was also the most unpleasant character—that it was too obvious for
readers…that they’d want that person
to be the murderer, anyway, and the element of surprise would be gone.  My choices were to make the killer more
likeable or to change the murderer altogether.
I decided to make the murderer more
likeable (although I frequently do change the killer for my editor…in fact, I’d
already changed the killer once for that very book.)  This was easier than it might sound.  I changed dialogue where the killer came off
sounding snarky and made the statements sound more genuine.  I showed the killer being a good citizen. I
showed the murderer helping the sleuth. 
I made the killer reluctant to gossip about the other suspects. I nice-d
the killer up.  Reader response later
indicated that the murderer’s identity remained a secret until the end (well,
some readers always guess the right suspect. Sigh.)
For non-mystery writers, showing your
villain’s good side has other advantages—mainly to add complexity to the
character and make them more believable. 
And keeping the reader…and your protagonist…guessing is also a nice side
effect.  Maybe it even gives your
protagonist second thoughts about the bad guy. 
It could also make the protagonist trust the antagonist again…which
could make the protagonist’s life more complicated.  Confusing the protagonist could be another
strategy to throw a bit of conflict in there.
Do you have any favorite multidimensional villains?  How do you
like to display other sides of your antagonist?

Elizabeth Spann Craig

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Elizabeth writes the Memphis Barbeque series (as Riley Adams) and the Southern Quilting mysteries for Penguin and writes the Myrtle Clover series for Midnight Ink and independently. She also has a blog, which was named by Writer’s Digest as one of the 101 Best Websites for Writers. There she posts on the writing craft, finding inspiration in everyday life, and fitting writing into a busy schedule.

13 Comments

  1. Margot KinbergJune 14, 2013

    Elizabeth – I couldn’t agree more. Murderers who are one-dimensional are boring. Even if there’s a catharsis when they’re caught, there’s no real invitation for the reader to engage in the novel. I think one way to make the murderer a little more multi-dimensional is to make sure the motive is believable and that the murderer is really affected by having killed. For instance, a killer could feel that her or his job is threatened by the victim. That sort of thing makes killers more human.

  2. Hilary Melton-ButcherJune 14, 2013

    Hi Elizabeth – the thought of writing a book .. and then having to change the villain or amend his character sounds a terrible idea to me – so much extra work .. but I guess if that’s what’s required – then that’s what happens. I can understand it .. and was interested in your approach to it …

    I never guess “who dun it” I enjoy the read .. I always think I should work it out .. but don’t!

    Cheers Hilary

  3. Paul Anthony ShorttJune 14, 2013

    I tried to keep both antagonists in Locked Within at least somewhat sympathetic. Both men became caught up in the desire to defy their own mortality, with an added sense of desperation because the woman they both loved was dying and they each thought they could save her.

  4. Elizabeth Spann Craig/Riley AdamsJune 14, 2013

    Hilary–Less work than it sounds, and worth the work it is…just because readers don’t enjoy crime fic as much when they figure it out (so I hear!) I’m one of those who *does* try to work out the killer as a reader (and I’ve gotten pretty good at it, too! Unfortunately.) :)

    Paul–You did a good job with it…great book. I think it just adds layers to our characters.

  5. Paul Anthony ShorttJune 14, 2013

    Thanks! Hopefully the same holds true for Silent Oath.

  6. L. Diane WolfeJune 14, 2013

    All people have depth and good points. A flat villain won’t be any fun to read about.

  7. Alex J. CavanaughJune 14, 2013

    True, even the devil knows how to be charming.

  8. Elizabeth Spann Craig/Riley AdamsJune 14, 2013

    Margot–Good point–so they feel like they’re boxed into a corner.

    Diane–They’ll be just as boring as a too-perfect character.

    Alex–Exactly!

  9. Elke FeuerJune 15, 2013

    I never thought I’d enjoy writing bad guys, but I do! I like to make mine fit in with everyone else, merely dropping hints in their dialogue or body language that they might be the villain.

    I especially liked to throw readers off by making other characters come across suspicious, so they’re (the reader) pulling their hair (or turning the page) to find out who dun it. Mawhahaha! :-)

  10. JoelJune 15, 2013

    This made me think of the marvelous article Shawn Coyne posted at Steven Pressfield’s blog today:

    http://www.stevenpressfield.com/2013/06/narrative-drive-2/

    It’s about suspense, mystery, and dramatic irony — 3 very different responses to how we reveal information about the people in our books, especially the villains.

    Raymond Chandler was a master of the likable villain and the ambiguous good guy. He’s my model.

  11. Jemi FraserJune 15, 2013

    I do like when I can’t guess the bad guy too – Agatha Christie always did such a great job of keeping me guessing! :)

  12. Elizabeth Spann Craig/Riley AdamsJune 15, 2013

    Elke–Fitting in is the best, for sure. That way no one guesses the killer too early!

    That’s what keeps readers reading!

    Joel–Haven’t seen the link yet…thanks for sharing. I’ll take a look now.

    Chandler was fantastic with his complex characters, in my opinion.

    Jemi–I’m re-reading a Christie book, now! Five Little Pigs…so good. :)

  13. jenna angleJune 27, 2013

    Mind-blowing….. presently I’m running with a local project, I hope it must be help me out.
    Thanks.

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